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Year 6 Authors

An adventure story by Aisha Year 6

Swish Splash where was I?

“Brrr, it is so cold and breezy,  brrr!” shivered Sam.  Bang CRASH!

“Help! Help!”  Said the young boy.  Suddenly Sam fell towards the sandy floor causing him to have a gigantic wound on his sweaty forehead. Veins were popping up on his head.  Boom Boom Blink! Eventually he woke up to find his friends surrounding him like tall trees giving Sam shade from the changing weather.

“I’m getting flashbacks” said Sam in a stuttering voice.   Splash!

“Something’s coming towards the shore, get back!”  shouted Tom, while they all began carrying Sam until the enormous abandoned ship came onto the shore. They began kicking a sandy box which was shimmering because of the sun. Despite how freaky they thought the box was they went towards it. Click!  Slowly Sam began revealing the damaged,  damp and filthy box.  Inside the mystery box was a damp ancient treasure map. Eventually flies began surrounding the treasure map. Buzz Buzz!  Finally they fixed the ship and headed towards the eerie, spooky cave, that was filled with treasure, gold coins and many jewels.

“Oops we’re in trouble” spluttered Sam.

“Enemies ahoy!” shouted Tom as they all began panicking.  Suddenly, there was a big bang CRASH!  Despite all the injuries from the shocking crash (which only happened because the enemies drove rapidly into our ship) we all began swimming towards the cave like Olympic swimmers.  “Finally we’re here, come on.” explained Johnny in an excited squeaky voice.  They grabbed all the money they could. Do you want to know how they use the treasure? Well they used it to get home, find their families and live a happy life, but to their surprise they were all Pirates!

“Aaaaaaaaaaagh!” screamed Sam.

“Aaaagh!”

 

Persuasive writing about gangs by Lemar Year 6

Only a fool, who has no common sense would have the audacity to think that joining a gang is cool. Many people like to join gangs for money, power, love and support. A variety of people don’t understand that if you join a gang you can get a £5,000 fine and get severely scarred for life. Is it worth it? Losing your family, friends and life? Did you know young offenders are young people that that commit crime. Would you seriously like that to be your child? So, what exactly is a gang? A gang is a group of people that listen to bad music and don’t care what people think. A gang is also a group of people who always wear balaclavas and  swag with their shorts or trousers down. Often gangs like to do their robbing, marauding, drug dealing and other stuff at night so they don’t get caught. This is because the consequences of getting caught are either going to prison or dying. Would you like that to be your child?

The consequences of joining a gang? The consequences of joining a gang are that you can really get hurt and also you can go to jail. Did you know that if you are in a gang and they are getting ready to fight or steal and you are there when the police arrive, they can still arrest you.  Would you like that to be your child or family? Think about it?

 

A  warning story by Ahlam Year 6

“Remember to not go into the basement where all the barbed wires are.” said Mum.  As soon as Mum left it was only me and my brother.  John, my brother ran upstairs to play video games.  I slowly trotted to the room next to the basement, I was as scared as a butterfly and I tingled with excitement while my hand was on the door knob. I asked myself should I do this. I thought it was early, only  9 a.m.

Curiously, I opened the door, CREAK…. . My heart was pounding, I was terrified. I’m worried.  Maliciously I strolled down the old wooden stairs. As soon as I stepped on the floor I got tangled up.  I thought I heard whispers surrounding me.  I could hear the door closing. I was alone and helpless. Kicking the barbed wire out of the way while shouting John came running down the stairs and helped me.  “What happened?” John shouted.  John was tempted to go to see for himself, what was behind the curious looking wiry door. Bang crash. “What was that?” ” It was nothing “I replied. I was terrified.  Suddenly, an idea popped into John’s mind, he really wanted to go inside, CREAK… In the distance there was a door.  Miraculously we laughed together. We were as happy as birds in the basement. The door looks brand new. We both were hearing things.  John pelted the door, bang knock knock! We slowly open the door. Mum arrived just in time, but we forgot to close the door. Mum was furious. She was like a bull in a china shop. Then she stepped in. “I told you, I even warned you!” she shouted. “John your sister could have been electrocuted.  You are both grounded for a week!”

“We’ve learned our lesson Mum” we gabbled.

 

Terrible Tuesday for Harltown by Mariam Year 6

Over the last 48 hours Harltown residents have been experiencing strange incidents, to do with the following; slime, pondweed, lily pads and puddles of water with leaves.

Toads take strolls in Harltown.

Suspicious reports were documented of hearing croaks early from twilight to the time of 7 a.m.  All around town items from private establishments have been taken and been replaced with a certain substance believed to be slime.  All around town, residents have been advised to study CCTV from Tuesday to Wednesday for more answers.

Early on the Wednesday September 28th 2008 an elderly lady, named Marjorie Smith, claimed that she awoke finding lily pads and slime in her living room. “My cat Fluffy was too afraid to enter the room, instead she was under my bed and she hates small spots!”  Mrs Smith commented.

The incident with the toads made the town crazy. A young gentleman, John Harris,  insisted on reporting highly bizarre knowledge and further sightings.  Such as tapping on window sills, missing laundry and his neighbour’s dog sleeping under a tree in the backyard. He continued informing us about strange noises, thinking it was a trick from early daylight.  Soon enough the morning police informed him it was the truth. Time for toads to rip it out of here.  Currently the police are investigating the slime. More detective fishermen are hired to give details about the fish. Soon we will close in the roads, watch CCTV,  news and much more. If more details are wanted you can find out more on www.gov.holtown.police.org, or if you have information please contact. 0200 57683 immediately.

 

A story focusing on techniques that build suspense by Hudayfa Year 6

I was walking for four days in the lonely desert. No, water to drink, no, food to eat, I thought I would die. Crash! I passed out. I woke up in this weird looking room. I went out of the spooky room. I cautiously tiptoed around the weird hotel, no one was there. In the distance, I heard the sound of someone crying.

I started to stroll towards the noise. I couldn’t stop myself from going to the peculiar noise. It was like metal attracted to a powerful magnet. In a heart-stopping moment I arrived at the destination of the crying. It was the horrifying room. Suddenly, I saw a lonely shadow of a man squashed in the corner of the room. Tiptoeing quietly I noticed a note in his pocket. I went to grab it. It was a curse. This is what it said,

“Whoever reads this note will be haunted by the Hounds of Hell! ” the shadow was still sobbing.. It was just as the darkness came that the shadow started speaking, but only asking my name. In a cold sweat I responded, “Hudayfa”.

I went to sleep and woke up in the middle of the night and saw the shadow sleeping on the other bed. In my mind, I thought this was peculiar because shadows are formed when an object blocks light. Anxiously I felt like I should have search the old hotel. The air was still. This is my chance to escape, so, I got closer to the exit, I heard something following me. I looked around, nothing was there.

My spine with tingling. I knew I had to escape. Something grabbed me, it was the shadow,

“You can’t leave, you read the letter, and the hounds of hell are waiting for !”  Urged the shadow. “I don’t care,  I want to leave this prison, and there is nothing you can do about it! “I shouted back.

I took one step out of the hotel…….the Hounds of Hell are coming!!!!!

 

I can write police interviews as scripts by Rafael Year 6

Policeman: What happened when you woke up?

Old lady: Interestingly, I so slime on my TV remote and on top of me, a few minutes later, I went to make breakfast and I saw my cat for frightened and shivering with fear, she didn’t want to go to the living room.

Policeman: What time did you wake up this morning?

Old lady: Surprisingly, I woke up earlier because I had heard police cars Sirens, but I. Had woke up at 8:30. B&M..

Policeman: What did you notice when you were sleeping?

Old lady: It was the strangest thing, because I was sleeping I could hear croaks, laughter and noises from the TV and I had woke up to see out of the corner of my eye I noticed a frog shaped shadow..

Policeman: Thank you for your time..

 

Interview with Doug Walker James.

Policeman: Can you explain why there is a lily pad on your dog?

James: Well, in the morning I was walking him and I let him go but he ran away, a few minutes later, he came back to me with a lily pad on top of him.

Policeman: What did you notice when you were out?

James: I noticed a lot of lily pad dropping in the distance; in the sky and saw a shadow of a frog and toad and a toad foot.

Policeman.: What happened after you went home?

James: Nothing really just me and my dog acting strangely.

Year 5 Authors

I’m able to discuss my prior knowledge of inventions by Peter year 5

It is said that the idea for the telephone was an accident, how so?

It was an accident. In 1849 Italian engineer Antonio Meucci made the first telephone when he was trying to make a cure for headaches. Meucci thought that electricity could cure headaches. During his experiments he found out that sound travelled through the wires he was using.

Meucci did not make any money from his invention, why was this?

Antonio Meucci did not make any money from his invention because soon after a very similar invention was produced by a man called Alexander Graham Bell. Alexander took this idea, made it better and then made a lot of money from it.

Why was cleaning carpets said to be hard work prior to the invention of the vacuum cleaner?

Cleaning carpets was hard work because people have to drag them outside and beat them around until all of the dust came out and floated into the air. This was until the vacuum cleaner was invented by Hubert Booth in the beginning of the 20th century.

Why do you think his idea was better than other cleaning inventions that were around at the time?

Hubert Booth thought his invention was better than others around at the time because for there weren’t too many other similar ideas and his invention was able to suck up dust and store in inside itself.

Why did Charles Strite decide to invent the pop-up toaster?

Charles Strite decided to invent the pop-up toaster because he was too sick and tired of all his toast getting burnt because he was doing something else.

 

Persuavsive letter writing by Yezda year 5

Dear Mr Pilkington,

I’m writing to inform you of the fantastic school travel opportunity available to your son Michael. Every year, year 5 pupils are given the opportunity to spend one week living and working on a fantastic farm in Gloucestershire. Some of the activities that Michael will be able to take part are weighing the pigs, finding fossils and making dens. Here are a few more things that your child will be doing; grooming horses, feeding the chickens, sheep horses, cows and pigs. Your child will also be making pizzas and salad. When your child goes to this farm trip they will learn about nature and country life!

From Yezda

 

I’m able to write a diary entry as a Victorian child at work by Sumaya year 5

Dear diary,

I am so happy I escaped from the workhouse and I found Rosie. One day the man with the square head sold me. I hope he does not take me to the workhouse again . I hope he takes me somewhere near my sister in the countryside. I might find my sister by running away to them and we might live in the same block. I miss the time I was selling fish with Rosie and Shremp. I can’t believe they haven’t taken Shremp but they took me. Maybe if they took Shremp to the workhouse with me and we could escape again, this time to the countryside. I really want to see Rosie again so we can sell fish and boot laces.

I’m sad about leaving my sister but now we have a good life. I don’t have to worry about them, I have to worry about myself, Shremp and Rosie. Rosie was my mum’s only friend, the only friend my mom ever had in her life. She didn’t have any more friends. The man that took me looked scary and freaky to me. I hope he lives in the countryside near my sister. I used to see my sister every day but now look at me. I have no sisters, just me alone with this man .

 

I am able to retell A Christmas Carol in my own words by Tiago year 5

Once there was an old man whose Scrooge. He was very selfish and only cared about money. He also had a clerk to work with it but the clerk barely had anything and didn’t get paid enough money so he was poor. One day Scrooge’s nephew came to visit. He shouted “Why hello uncle do you know that tomorrow is Christmas uncle?”

Scrooge muttered “Bah humbug”

“ Christmas a humbug uncle?” shouted Scrooge’s nephew. “I hate to see you this way come dine with us tomorrow?”

“No, Good afternoon” said Scrooge.

“Merry Christmas and Happy New Year”, then he left .

Two men then came to visit Scrooge. One of them said “Scrooge we need some of your money for the poor people in the workhouse because some people would rather die”.

Scrooge said “Well if they would rather die then they better do it soon so it would decrease the population. Good Afternoon.”

Then the two men said “Good Afternoon” . The reason Scrooge does not Christmas was because of Marley. He died on Christmas day seven years ago. That’s is why Scrooge hates Christmas. When it was the end of the day Scrooge walked home and so did the clerk. When Scrooge got home he sat down on his chair and heard a noise. It sounded like dragging heavy chains. Scrooge also heard bells ringing and footsteps . Scrooge had butterflies in his stomach. Suddenly a ghost appeared right in front of him, He was frightened so he asked the ghost who it was. The ghost said that he was Marley.

 

I am able to retell a Christmas Carol by  ???? year 5

A long time ago there was a man named Scrooge. It was the time near Christmas and everyone was happy. All except one, and that mine was Scrooge. Scrooge was at work with his employee, the clerk. “This I can’t understand, just because it’s Christmas you get a day off” angrily exclaimed Scrooge. Then the clerk replied

“It’s quite convenient”

“It’s not convenient! I want to see you here earlier next morning” demanded Scrooge.

Then they both set off home. Scrooge walked into the fog so no one could see his face, he liked it like that. Once he got home he was unlocking his door he notice the face on the door knocker was Marley. Marley was an old work partner that died that very night seven years ago.

“M M M Marley? Jacob Marley?” Scrooge said as the door knocker turn back to normal. Scrooge sat in his room with his fireplace lit. Suddenly bells started ringing all over the house then Marley came through the door and shouted

“You have made a grave mistake by focusing on money!”

“You’re not real, you’re just a piece of undigested fleck of underdone potato.2 whispered Scrooge.

“AHHHHHHHH!” screamed Marley.

“You’re real aren’t you” whimpered Scrooge.

“You will be visited by three phantoms. Two 12 a.m. and the last at 1 a.m.” The phantom said as he jumped onto the window. When Scrooge woke up he was greeted by a glowing woman.

“W-W-W what are you? Wait are you the ghost that’s????? Asked Scrooge.

“Yes I am the ghost of your past” the ghost said as they teleported through time lines.

Pirate Story by Yan

On the sunny side of the sea the crew were working very hard and the one-legged captain called Hook left to see the cook. “Elizabeth, what’s the dinner? Fish?” Suddenly Hook saw a map. “What’s that?” he said to himself. He went to the crew saying “I have found something very good, a map that leads us to Cocoplum Island with treasure, me hearties!”

Later on the crew went south. “Oh no!” the watcher said, “Captain Hook, we have gigantic waves ahead.” Bravely they went through the waves and the Island became closer. They had a problem, there was another ship.

Captain Hook said “War!” Then they got their bombs. Boom! Club! The other ship sank. Hooks crew had won the battle! They were so happy that they had won the fight.

The deck with brighter than the shining and sun soon it was dinner time. Cook Elizabeth said “Boys, food is ready”. They had fish for dinner and then went for a swim before they went to bed. In the morning the captain found a bright red ruby. He kept it for himself. He did not tell anyone!

Captain Hook was looking for his jewels. Suddenly, he found himself and the crew on a desert island. The cook was making fish and Hook said “Fish again?”

“Yes, but it is a fish pie”.

“This is where we are getting our treasure, it is on the map. Crew, wake up!” yelled the Captain.

Pirate Story by Jessica Year 5

A bright, glimmering sun was shining on the ship. You can hear the clink and clank of the cook’s tools cracking fish bones. Swish, sweep, splat, splash! The pirates were working their hardest while the captain relaxed peacefully. At the pirates started falling asleep, their dream start forming. Gold jewels and diamonds was all the pirates dreamed of.

The next morning the captain was furious because he couldn’t find his sword. Then he found the thing he had been longing for 20 years. It was a treasure map leading them to an island! “Wake up you sculleywumps!”(Means being lazy pirates) “You’re late! You are supposed to be scrubbing the decks” roared Captain Sparrow. Wackadoodley, the parrot, flew into the rooms but the pirates weren’t there…..

It turns out that the pirates were tormented and sobbing in a corner….. No one knew why, but it was because their dreams had not come true. “Stop sobbing sculleywumps because I’ve got a map leading to an island” screamed the captain. The pirates stood up and ran to their stations. Whoosh! Crash! Bump! A storm had come up and the is beautiful sun had disappeared and the sky was black and stormy. Gushing waves nearly drowned the pirates but they did not give up. Luckily the pirates made chain in the sea, saving their souls but they were as cold as ice.

Shiver, shiver, shiver, the pirates realised that the boat was drifting away. Luckily the anchor dropped, stopping the boat. As they swam they found the island. The quartermaster was so bad tempered he yelled “Hurry up you idiotic, spoilt and unsightly pirates we have to get to the island to check the gold!”(Nothing is better than gold),

Splish Splash Splosh! The pirates swam and finally arrived at the boat, but had no time to eat or warm up. They steered the boat to get to the island. An hour later they finally arrived the island but it was full of enemies. The captain with sour, beastly and vile but he knew he and his pirates would have to fall back. So they ran away and steered out safely…. and were never seen or heard of again.

Pirate Story by Munira Year 5

On a hot sunny day November the pirates all woke up from their sleep. The cook, Alvin, was making the breakfast. A member of the crew was waking everyone up. “Wakey! Wakey!”

Alvin was seven fish. Everybody jumped to their seats. “Halt! Everybody listen closely”. CLONK! BLONK! SPONK! CONK! They all stood up as the captain hover walked. He had an old ragged piece of paper. They all came closer. Was this what they were longing to see? Have they been waiting for this to seventy eight long…long.. years?

Excitedly they disembarked from the ship at Transylvania. They followed an old knight to a spooky castle. “I promise I’ll feed you with hot chocolate and chicken”. The evil crooked knight set them in a trap. He took them down to the dungeons and that is where they solved it. They were very clever and dug a hole underground and they went through. That’s not all! They freed their real captain and nursed him. The greedy pirates took all the money before they left the old ugly castle. When they escaped they looked back at the treasure map. They followed the map to a little island called it is Ismalva.

This little island was not any ordinary island, it was an island which has an electric orb all around it. The island was full of booby-traps, snakes and many more things. They heard a rustling in the bushes. Rattle….Slither… Bam! They heard of quartermaster whipping someone like he was whipping cream. Again they heard it. One by one each member of the crew came out. In the end captain Chooker came out.

In the end they defeated the ugly, nasty lions and they took all the booty. The quartermaster shared it all out to the others (even the cook Alvin was given some). If you are wondering what the crew’s name was it was the Red Killers. If you’re only what the individual names were here they are; Mildfer, Square, Siquira, Saara, Astrid, Squasher, Vleanna, Helverd and last of all Vic. When they took all the booty they sailed back to the Caribbean Sea.

Pirate Story by Lemar Year 5

Crash! The thunder boomed around the dry wooden boat. All the crew jumped in their seats. The storm had been ranging from half an hour. They were all scared so they shivered and chatted their teeth. However they were determined to find the treasure. Eventually one of the pirates called Red Beard spotted a desert island by looking through his telescope. “LOOK! LOOK!” shouted Red Beard, madly waving his hands in the air and pointing to the small speck in the distance. “That is where the treasure is!”

However when they got to the island there was a problem….dun..dun..dun.

All around the ship there were blue sharks and the pirates knew that there were bloodthirsty sharks because of the fins pointing out to the water.

“How we going to get to the island!” exclaimed Captain Red Beard.

“I know what to do to get to the island” announced Pirate Black Beard.

“What’s your idea?!” screamed Captain Red Beard.

“My idea is to throw fish in the water to distract them.”

As soon as the sharks were distracted the pirates swam calmly to the island and stole the precious treasure. Hooray!

The Slimy Monster By Mikolaj

A long time ago in a huge village there was a young, smart man living with his grandma and granddad I a small house. His name was Max. He only had one friend to play with. Max liked to play fight and they travelled to the back garden where they trained. In the afternoon Max walked back home to go to sleep. I the morning Max woke up and asked his grandma if he could play outside. Out of the blue came a slimy, red monster dripping with disgusting slime. Max felt terrified and was anxious. Immediately the king’s guards sprinted to stop Max. Max now felt worried and scared. Early the following morning Max embarked on his quest to defeat the slimy monster.

The Deadly Gorgons by Peter Year 4

Long ago before the beginning of time, in the land of the heavens there lived two gods called Zeus and Poseidon. They had a brother called Hades. There were three deadly Gorgons called Deadly Medusa, Poisonous Medusa and Dark Medusa. They planned on destroying the mystical planet Saturn, but Zeus, Poseidon and Hades were strong, brave, smart and cunning and would do anything to save the beautiful world of Saturn. They were prepared to fight the ugly, evil gorgons and travel on their magic pet dragons all the way to a slimy ugly cave. They arrived there almost instantly because how fast the dragons arrive. The battle began and it was thr4ee versus three. The battle was nearly over. The gods were strong; Zeus used his bolts and killed the three disgusting, evil, nasty gorgons. The three gods flew home on their three dragons. They lived happily until another monster landed on the planet.

King Minos by Suwayda Year 4

On the next island in Greece lived evil King Minos. King Minos was evil and he made everyone his slave. Everyone brought him gifts. King Minos told Daedalus to get Medusa. His sister gave Daedalus a sword and shield. Daedalus went to find Medusa. He heard someone asleep, it was Medusa. Daedalus was brave and chopped her head off.

Street Child – Description of a setting – Heavenly Seetah Year 5

In the Victorian street you can hear children suffering and weeping for water and food. I can hear children and adults yelling. I can smell alcohol, horse poop and smoke that lingers around the narrow town. I can taste meet and gravy pies, buns, fruit and vegetables from the store from the store. I can touch animals, mould, dirty stuff and also grime on the wall. I can see violent families with children begging for money, water and food. I can see horses collapsing, drunk people falling, small shops, narrow roads and a smoking gloomy air. People are rushing everywhere and people selling food for a shilling so that I can buy food for themselves.